Gooding-Helium-Rottweilers

The prompt I chose for my Helium this week was Facts about Rottweilers. I learned many facts about rottweilers that I would never have known. I had no idea that they were descendants of the drover dogs of Rome. When the industrial revolution happened many rottweilers lost their usual jobs to trains and cars. I also didn't know that rottweilers were used as police dogs. The best essay defiantly deserved it. The author knew her facts and how to make them flow into a well organized essay. The author used a sort of time line while writing her essay. She started with the historical facts and jobs that the rottweilers were accustomed to doing. Then she preceded to talk about what the rottweilers physical appearance looks like and the basic facts about the rottweilers. Then the author talked about what the rottweilers are doing now in the service world. I feel like the author defiantly knew what she was talking about and had great flow between each paragraphs. This essay was very well written and had many great writing elements in it. I feel like this essay deserved to be number one. For the lesser essay I feel like it could have had better flow to it. I feel like the author was sorta scattered brained and didn't really have her facts in the best order that they could have been in. Also when the essay should have been rottweilers the author started talking about labrador retrievers. I feel like the author didn't grasp the full concept of the prompt. I think that I would have focused more on the rottweilers and had more facts and better detail, like the 1st essay had. I would have used great detail and examples with this prompt. I would also have gone with the history and the basic facts of the rottweilers such as the first prompt had did.